Words of this song,
magic of the notes,
memory of lost love,
lingers on..
I remember the look
from joy of my hopes,
hurt from my secrets,
such flash images grow..
Your sorrows,i know
gifted from the evening
of passion shared,and
words of no meaning…
If you could please
punish me for everything,
and have things your way,
just once, say something…
**
Written for One Shot Wednesday
This is an attempt at translation this poem i wrote in my mother tongue hindi . Those who can understand it, will agree, this english version does not really has the charm. But i did try !
You seek forgiveness and love and the same time. Brilliantly expressed.
Nimue:
I love the direction your work is taking.
Jaye
I think the image created has incredible charm. It touched a sensitive spot, yet not fully understanding why love’s contact had to end. “Passion shared and words of no meaning”, sad.
Very good, but sad.
deeply profound.. and message is conveyed with its own emotion!
Hugs and wishes your way .. I hope what you want comes true
your words are like flowers
Found on a woodland walk;
They are pastels just for color
In the fields, of talk.
Their petals, soft and gentle
Their hearts, so bright and wide;
Still holding all their fragrance,
Most delicate, inside.
(My first try of reply with poem
)
such flash images … words!
just say something, even if to punish me…a sad longing in those lines…
lovely. love is full of contrasting colours.
Very sad, especially the ending.
Very nicely done, Nimue!
Here’s mine:
http://mypoetcharm.blogspot.com/2011/01/introduce-me-to-your-emotions.html
oh waiting for a response…anything is the hardest thing of all…makes one feel so invisible. Beautifully written, thank you.
Aaahh.. It’s amazing how loves makes us apologize for everything we do and don’t ! Only to be with the other…
And then comes that longing… that mind numbing longing.. *sigh*
Absolutely beautifully expressed, dear girl…
mwaahhzz!
You said it all !! the mind numbing longing is the worst to pass at times …
hugs