Loneliness grows,
adamant,I fabricate
peculiar desire.
Prompted @ 3WW and Sensational Haiku Wednesday
Today in Poetry Spotlight, I share with some wonderful lines from Jen to her daughter . I bet many of you would relate to these :
Did I give her all the things she needs?
Did I give her all the things she needs?
To earn, to respect, to fight, to be free
Did I teach her well, did I do it right?
Who knows for sure, I gave all my might.
Common sense tells me she’ll be alright..
The poem is wonderful. I am still bad at getting essence of haikus.
Some day you will ..
Succinct…
Here is my 3WW:
don’t be shocked, I can handle power tools
I love how you say so much in so few words. Loneliness can bear such sour fruit.
totally agree on that !
These two pieces compliment each other – one person wanting..the other person regretting a loss..a child grown..Jae
Thank you for the re-blog.. I see it as a great honor.. you are very talented in your own realm..
As lovely a haiku as I would expect from such a soul as yours. I’ve said this before, but folks who can draw a meaningful haiku from the 3WW prompt are nothing short of geniuses, so add that to the adjectives I already use to describe you.
Mine is a funny – RJ and MadKane inspired me…
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/04/06/all-in-a-name-3ww-npwm-6/
So have a laugh on me! Amy
Also went to the site you mentioned, and here was my comment there:
Nimue led me here, and so glad she did. As a mother of a daughter, I feel your pride in every word of this poem. And yes, there is self-doubt all along the way. Truth is, the wings she sprouts are uniquely hers. Whether the first pair is made of wax and she stumbles, or whether they are the ideal first pair that are made to last, either way, we all do our best.
Peace, Amy Barlow Liberatore
And here is a poem about my Riley – quite different from your own experience, but showing that same love:
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2010/11/17/she-didnt-change/
you are so sweet Amy
I bet Jen would have loved it !!
And Thank you for the Re-post..
Any time welcome Jen !!
Thank you again for your kind words..
Just the fact that you can ask all those things even in a poem means you have succeeded great poem
So clever, well done!
Great use of the words.
Loneliness is a great dream maker.
Fabrications are a sort of growth, are they not?
Hopefully the lonliness stops growing!
I’m sure you raised her right
Liked this one alot…an economy of words, but fully expressed. Your namesake is referenced in my most current post “Trouble in Camelot”
Indeed can relate to the last poem.
better not give “loneliness” a foothold in your heart. Solitude is perfectly fine for our health, loneliness can kill.
the haiku touched the heart very deeply.
loved the sweet poem you added by jen. true parents can never give enough to their kids (as per parents) they always want to give more and more.
its a clinical truth- loneliness is breeding ground of lots of diseases.
if you want to see the picture in colours you can check out my blog:
http://etherealheights.wordpress.com
i painted the picture and then just used some special effects on it
trisha
http://sharmishthabasu.wordpress.com/2011/04/08/the-visitor-for-3ww/
I liked your haiku — good job with that prompt.
your blog has not stopped its mischief completely. it again bothered me the day before yesterday, deprived me from posting comments.
Ah… such emotion in that haiku! Well done!
“to fabricate a peculiar desire” is genius in itself. this is a beautiful haiku!
Good one, nimue, good one. I admire your ability to combine more than one prompt in 17 syllables … well done!